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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 9:34 am

(Goddammit Lance... XD

Delilah: Aw... That's cute. X3

Aaron: .////.")
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 1:38 pm

(*thoughtfully stares at Pantheon stuff after doodling some Kolerin peeps* ... I'm feeling the urge to start writing this all over again. There must be some big changes, though... *intense staring*)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 2:15 pm

(DO IT.

JUST DO IT.

PLEASE.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 2:23 pm

(Just rewrite the entite thing. Sounds crazy, but you'll notice what needs to be changed. I literally rewrote an entire speech doing this, as I was doing a good copy typed out on a computer. A Tumblr post brought this up, and it's a really good idea.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 2:48 pm

(I'm starting at the beginning and picking at it. Not entirely rewriting, but doing a lot of tweaking... Deleting entire sentences and changing things around, fixing awkward wording... A lot of details will be changed once I get to the later chapters I have written. They'll practically be entirely new chapters. XD)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 2:58 pm

(I see. Okay.

The only things I still want in it is Nick being that awkward uncle figure, and there being an outright past relationship with Stone and Roy, but didn't work out. That's it. And maybe Nick's full arm being prosthetic, instead of just part of his forearm.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 3:53 pm

(I'm the one writing the book, woman! XD)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 4:25 pm

(I'm just saying!)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 4:29 pm

(I'm going to be making some pretty big changes and removing some characters... I feel like I have too many lined up right now. I'll keep what details I see fitting, but at this point Stone might not even be a major character.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 4:43 pm

(That's fine, but at least some reference when refering to Roy's sexuality would be enough. He doesn't even have to appear at all.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 4:47 pm

(I'll see about it... Right now I'm just making edits to what I already have written. Which somehow stretched it from 83 to 87 pages so far. XD)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 4:53 pm

(Wow... o3o"

When you're done, can you email it to me please? If you can? I wanna read what you changed.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 5:02 pm

(Okay. Hopefully I still have your email somewhere. XD

Also, huge change: Aaron is the VP instead of Ruth. I feel like the mousey is too bland to be a major character, and she doesn't feel suited to the role.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 5:11 pm

(Hmmm... That's an interesting change, especially since Roy and Aaron don't exactly see eye to eye on things... But I like it. It gives them an excuse to bond and actually like one another. And Nani and Laura being BBFs.)
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(The main characters all supposedly met as young soldiers in the local militia, so they were friends before that, but having Aaron and Roy work together seems amusing and logical at the same time. XD)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 5:22 pm

(Yeah, they are. XD

Aaron: ...Huh.

Roy: ...No comment.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 5:28 pm

(Nani and Laura: *just smile and look at each other*

Your women will help keep the peace. XD And later, your kids!)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 5:46 pm

(Roy and Aaron: .///.

Now I need feels and shit with Pantheon. I NEED THEM.)
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(Haha. XD They will come, eventually.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 6:29 pm

(But first, Roy and Aaron are gomna try not to kill one another.

To be honest, I feel like Roy would be the one to bring up, you know, trying to get along for pretty much everyone's sake?)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 7:06 pm

(He actually mentions choosing Aaron because he knows he isn't afraid to argue with him. XD Roy is only the second president, and everyone is grieving over Lucas. He needs a VP who will hold his own and be willing to take action. And be the intimidating figure that Roy is not. XD)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 7:16 pm

(P!Roy: I-I'm intimidating! ene

P!Aaron: *raises an eyebrow at him* ...Sure. You keep thinking that.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 7:26 pm

(He doesn't actually mention the intimidating thing, but it's true. XD The Council is pushy, so having Aaron bark at them is nice for the more softspoken Roy. When the two of them are on the same side, that is.)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 7:49 pm

(Also, Rachel is so the dominant one in her marriage. XD Oh, how I missed Pantheon... *chuckles*)
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PostSubject: Re: Kolerin: UNDERGROUND   Kolerin: UNDERGROUND - Page 37 Icon_minitimeWed Sep 16, 2015 8:31 pm

(*wail* I need my Kolerin people! I must blab and brainstorm about Pantheon, because I finished revising up to the last chapter I was working on... AN UNFINISHED CHAPTER!

... I'm in crazy writer person mode.)
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